Books To Date:
Sons Of The Apocalypse MC:
Axel
Jace
Brandon
Jesse
Blazing Devils MC:
Jackal
Beau
Hyde
Carter Mafia Family:
Lark
Jaxson
Jason (coming Soon)
The trash bag, carrying every little thing that I owned, weighed heavily in my hand.
I would change it to remembered
delete
How about “….”
Add comma after know
Add comma after it
Add comma after reason
Add comma after child
Period after that and capitalize It’s
“”
Switch question mark to a period
“
comma after stay
Add what after than. “…better than what most get”
change to get
Period after upstairs. Add It’s the first…
Place period after you.
Walk-in
Add a comma after mattress
smiled
Add the word ‘on’ “basically on the floor”
Add comma before it. “…floor, it was mine.”
Add comma after bed
Add a comma before and
Period after getting
Capital O.
I knew there
Comma after woman
Comma after name
looked
Comma before and
Period after spinning
Comma after moment
Comma after close
I would delete
I’m a little confused… who is saying this?
Comma before and
Comma after embarrassment
Who is talking…. Lucy?
I’m Lucy or something like that.
Comma before and
It’s a little confusing trying to figure out who’s talking.
My name is..
Comma before and
looked
Comma instead of period then add which “…pillow, which Hyde gave to me as a gift.”
period after laughed
universe and the only person…
confusing, I don’t understand this
You may want to add ever. “No one ever comes into my room.”
Period after deep
Was still
Change to and. “He would try to make this better and take the blame to protect me.
Period after me
grabbed
clothes
stuffed
period after voice
Those
Comma after face
watched
period after window
comma before but
one word. overdrive
Add and. …carpet and his bosy was taking up…
And rushed
Comma after sight
One word
Is this in the future? If Lucy is 13 how old is Hyde?
Comma before and
fuzzies
Should be capital.
Did you mean couldn’t explain?
Period after her
watched
capital T. “I watched as everyone nodded. This was our way into the fold.”
Capital. Mouse
It and Jackal
Period after somewhere
felt
comma before and
twisted
growled
comma before and
And forced
I looked
Comma before and
And pulled
Comma after no
Period after did
Comma before and
“… thankful that Kara
Comma before and
Comma before in
“… his that I had left, even…”
Comma after Lucy
Comma before and
I would add and.”…hell, and I could…
Comma after Kara
Comma before and
Comma before and
Comma after prison
I looked at the man digging a hole and let the memories slip away.
“Come on man, hurry the fuck up”
“…grave, so go fuck…”
Comma before so
“…the original plan of a slow painful death that you deserve.”
watched
comma before but
Wouldn’t
Comma after man
Comma after dug
Comma before and
I looked
I grabbed
I grabbed the shovel, and started to shovel the dirt one scoop at a time.
folded
placed
shower, some beer, and pussy, but not in that order.
I bit
I bit down and I expected….
Comma after go
The only thing I was sure was, these people…
comma after say
His already cold face turned colder. The fury was written in ever little nuance.
Comma before and
Comma before and
“Ah, I see. No worries.”
Comma before and
“… but I didn’t need to, he was
gave
comma before and
knowledge seep in that I wasn’t….
comma before and
Jackal’s
shoved
shoved the blond that was draped over my body off the bed
comma before it
the blond started whining
comma before and
Comma before and
women
comma before and
was
period after wheeling.
Capital. It
Comma before my
Comma before the
No comma
This is still his number, isn’t it?
One word voicemails
Delete semicolon
Period after her. Capital He
One word. pussyfoot
Period after shit
Comma after please
Comma after this
knew
comma after did
comma after expect
comma after go
comma before and
contemplated
period after face
Kara
Beau’s
releived
period after bar
restroom
period after alone
comma after please
comma after stayed
nod and I smiled
I quickly locked
And scanned
And my determination…
Comma before and
“… pace, and I was soon running..”
I turned ..
She’s
looked
doe-eyed
comma after than
her
Waterworks
Now and she
Period after tears. “She thought it would sway me…”
Comma after second
Michael’s
Comma before and
Comma after brother
sank
no comma
He caught
Comma after heel
remembered
comma after fucked
screamed
I then watched
“… and fingerprint like..”
I suggest changing this to “…and fingerprint like bruises were forming.
“… forgettable and I would…”
“…. would tell them that when they would take us…..”
Comma before and after Emilia
Comma before and
was starting to surface, and so…
before I couldn’t take any more.
Delete and. Begin new sentence. “My fragile hold on reality was snapping an no one….”
“… who this was, it was Mouse.”
I don’t have any time for this shit.
Comma after so
I would put a period after location and start a new sentence with “A second…”
Comma before and
I would put a period after hon and make “It will be okay” a new sentence
Comma after Miss us
Comma before and
Comma before and
Comma after quiet
Comma before and
Comma before and
I would end the sentence with me. Erase what and start the new sentence with I “…then it hit me. I was…
One word. gunshots
Comma after for
“…to be sorry for. I was an…”
Comma before baby
“…them. It seemed…”
leak
comma before and
period after while
comma after her
I wanted to be in there holding her.
Comma after thing
Comma before not
Comma after life
Comma before and
She was the girl from my past
Heartbreaking. End of sentence
She needed news, and I had none.
Comma before Hyde
gave
surprise. It
deeply
filleted
comma before and
herself, and my shirt
helpless. Something
times were due
comma after yeah
what do you thing…. “…didn’t even bother removing my shoes.”
Comma before and
“…Tom and no one..”
I cupped
tired
comma before Hyde
comma after darlin
I stood and walked
Did you mean bought?
I turned to look
knelt
fingernails
comma after Hyde
Question mark after Moment
“..a sign that it’s okay. “ Erase look and place period
New sentence. “I walked out the..”
Comma before and
Comma before and
Period after brother. “Once again, the woman..”
clouded
period after felt. Start new sentence with “I was..”
period after Beau
period after head, New senence with Talking
Comma after there
shocked, and I
comma before and
… tension, which was
Comma after know
Comma after some
Nodded. It was the …
Comma before and
Touching me. It sent
comma after closed
comma after things
comma before and
comma before and
comma before and
… alley. The
Comma after god
Comma before and
Comma before and
Period after Alissa. Start sentence with Three
once and it
watched
did you mean “…his eyes turned”
And leaned
tilted
It’s me, okay? If you..
Stop. I’ve drempt of this
Savor it, I needed
fought
Comma after instead
eyed
comma before and
comma before and
..him and widen
comma after please
comma before and
comma before and
my
comma before and
comma after rough
I ignored it
Anoher screamed escaped me as
Comma after way
Comma before but
Comma before and
Comma before and
…I started to pace.
… get them for me
Comma after child
Those, of course, didn’t
Comma before and
…our, I mean his room was
Comma before and
Not slow down. Not even
Comma before and
..combination of the night…
watched
climbed
hand with a …
climbed
comma after him
squealed
comma after years
watched
shades are more
stop, not by
helped
watched
removed
took
closed
reached
linked
comma before and
comma before and
walked
didn’t
I released him and walked
Like someone who hasn’t…
I turned and gasped
…captive and stared
knew
was written
comma after wrong
almost completely went out.
man and whispered
…he said had a fear of death…
I would join the sentences. …. beside me and he almost…
leaned
comma before and
alleyway
and pushed
pressed
madman
there
he removed the
knew
and it
Although, I wasn’t
me and deserved
Slowly, I
looked
wanted
I was, that he was
going. At
laughed as I
comma before and
grabbed
turned
pushed
I pulled
comma after lips
me, an coated
comma before and
…arms and the
remembered
remembered
comma before and
comma after pocket
noticed
comma before someone
clubhouse
I turned and looked
Comma before table
gave
watched
comma after now
I turned
…and gave him
…over, getting
….her, he
men
comma before and
…and watched
.. and debated
Short-lived
Comma after time
looked
…this. Once again…
And tried
Comma after pocket
And called
I turned and looked
watched
climbed
…there and staired
I nodded
…and looked
The shocks gasped and echoed
And made me
…to me, it was
Comma after please
And I
Continued, since I didn’t…
Comma before and
Her hands covered her…
Comma before and
Comma before and
Comma before and
I stood and ran
I climbed
…car, and looked..
….place and it wanted
Comma after you
…I crossed
To look
…cliff. The..
Comma after her
Period after edge
Comma before but
on
watched
Comma before and
Comma before and
flatlining
watched
…sound, the..
cradled
watched
mother’s
comma after boob